Before (Unclear + loosely structured):
“The study investigates the effects of Drug X on Disease Y. Results show some positive effects, but more research is needed. The sample size was 200, but some patients dropped out.”
After (Clear + submission-style structure):
“This study evaluates the therapeutic effects of Drug X on Disease Y using a randomized, placebo-controlled design (n = 200). Results indicate improved clinical outcomes; despite an 8% withdrawal rate, findings remain statistically robust, supporting further investigation in larger cohorts.”
